Sunday, March 13, 2011
THE BROKEN HEART BLOGFEST ENTRY
http://itsinthebookde.blogspot.com/2011/01/announcing-broken-heart-blogfest.html
Ok, this is my entry from my current work in progress. It is undergoing editing at the moment so I apologize if it is not up to standard yet.
‘’You don’t have to leave’’ Alex said, trying to sound comforting but failing at it.
‘’There is a whole werewolf army out there that would like nothing more than to rip me to pieces. Of course I have to go. I have to figure a few things out’’ I said, sounding as if I was in a hurry.
I didn’t want to look at Alex. He would have some awkward look in his eyes.
I turned, not wanting to look at him and stared at the broken window. He caught me staring and gave a deep sigh. I of course pretended that I hadn’t noticed the window and turned back to my kitchen to rummage for something to take with me.
‘’I never did apologize for what I did. I am sorry. I was just—’’
‘’I don’t need your apology Alex’’ I snapped.
‘’Do you know where you are heading?’’ he said truly concerned.
I paused for a second, looking at him head on.
‘’No. I am just going to drive. Do you mind if I keep your truck for a little while longer?’’
He gave a little laugh ‘’consider it yours’’.
I turned back to the cupboards.
‘’What are you looking for?’’ he said walking into the kitchen and coming to stand next to me.
‘’Nothing’’ I said moving away from him.
‘’Is that what it is going to be like? You…running away every time I am in sniffing distance?’’
‘’It is my natural instinct to avoid you’’ I lied.
‘’You do it because weirdly enough you’re still afraid of me’’.
‘’Can you blame me?’’.
He walked out of the kitchen.
‘’You’re going to have to stop at a blood bank. And you might as well buy everything else you need when you get to your destination. You need some company?’’ he said.
I looked at him startled.
‘’I have to do this alone. It might take a while for me to fix everything and I think it would be better if you stayed here with your family’’ I tried to sound appreciative of the offer but I sounded harsh.
I grabbed my duffle bag and walked past him to the front door. I was halfway out of the door when I heard him talking.
‘’Don’t forget these’’ he said handing me my biker boots.
I took the boots from him, trying my best not to touch his skin.
‘’Thanks’’ I said walking past him to the kitchen counter and picking up my old apartment keys. ‘’The apartment and everything in it belongs to you. So you can sell it or do what ever you like’’ I said waiting for him to take the keys from me.
‘’I bought it for you’’.
‘’I won’t be using it anymore. I think I had enough of city life’’ I said dangling the keys for him to take.
He reached up and took the keys from my fingers.
‘’Thank you for everything. You are awesome’’ I said hesitating beside him.
He looked at me, wanting to reach out for me but hesitating. I in turn was staring at him too, not sure how exactly I was supposed to say goodbye to my soul mate.
It was a really awkward moment and it didn’t help that both of us were naturally stubborn people. Neither of us was going to show weakness in front of the other by giving in and giving an emotional response.
‘’See you when I see you’’ I said, smiling as I walked out the door.
As I walked out of the apartment I could hear him sigh and it didn’t sound like a sigh of relief. He sounded upset—in pain even.
I walked to the truck and put all the stuff on the back seat. I hesitated for a second, looking up at the broken window one last time and then I saw Alex staring down at me.
I gave him a big smile. But he didn’t respond.
I looked at him for one more second and then I was in the truck, driving away. Away from my past and heading into my future, finally getting to make the fresh start I always wanted.
Saturday, March 12, 2011
THE BROKEN HEART BLOGFEST
OUT OF IT
I woke up this morning in a state of panic. I realized that the A-Z challenge is just 3 weeks away and I have not even written one post in preparation for it. I am usually very organized and I always have something to blog about but lately I have come up blank. Though, there is still some time left for me to get ready.
I don't know how so many of you manage to be part of a large online community, find time to visit every one's blog and find time to write. I take my hat of to you guys. You are truly awesome.
My amount of followers has only recently increased so I am a newbie at blogging time management. So I am sorry if I don't get to every one's blog regularly. I am working out a schedule so I should find a solution soon.
I have recently bought myself a large white board on which to work out my plots and strategies for revision. Right now I am working on trying to show more than tell, but it is not easy.
I don't know if it is just me but this post even reads a bit heavy. I don't know what is going on with me. Writing suddenly seems so difficult.
I don't know how so many of you manage to be part of a large online community, find time to visit every one's blog and find time to write. I take my hat of to you guys. You are truly awesome.
My amount of followers has only recently increased so I am a newbie at blogging time management. So I am sorry if I don't get to every one's blog regularly. I am working out a schedule so I should find a solution soon.
I have recently bought myself a large white board on which to work out my plots and strategies for revision. Right now I am working on trying to show more than tell, but it is not easy.
I don't know if it is just me but this post even reads a bit heavy. I don't know what is going on with me. Writing suddenly seems so difficult.
Wednesday, March 9, 2011
FIRST BLOGGER AWARD!
I have received my first blogger award. I am still in shock. I am totally having an academy awards moment here.
Ok, I am calming down. With my awesome award comes rules that I have to stick to so...
Rule 1 - Thank the person who awarded it to you.
Thank you Heather from THE WAITING IS THE HARDEST PART (http://hmgardner.blogspot.com/). You are one awesome lady and I would not have survived in the blogger world if not for you. You helped me through very tough times and your writing is something to aspire to. Thank you.
Rule 2 - Share 7 facts about yourself.
1. I am the youngest of 4 children.
2. I love cupcakes!
3. I have a Bachelors Degree in Agriculture.
4. I believed that vampires actually existed up and till I was 16 years old.
5. I tend to wear a lot of black clothes.
6. I once helped a sheep give birth.
7. I always look at the dessert menu first before I eat at a restaurant.
Rule 3 - Choose _____ bloggers to pass this award on to.
I choose #6.
Rule 4 - Notify said recipients of the #3 rule.
Here they are in no particular order:
1. Renee Silvana (http://reneesilvana.blogspot.com/).
2. Nancy (http://introverted-writer.blogspot.com/).
3. Carla (http://carla-jansen.blogspot.com/).
4. J.C. Martin (http://jc-martin.com/fighterwriter/).
5. Katharine Owens (http://katharineowens.blogspot.com/).
6. Wolfie (http://writer-person.blogspot.com/).
Thank you again Heather, you are one awesome lady and thank you to everybody that reads my blog. I am always grateful for your support and interest.
Ok, I am calming down. With my awesome award comes rules that I have to stick to so...
Rule 1 - Thank the person who awarded it to you.
Thank you Heather from THE WAITING IS THE HARDEST PART (http://hmgardner.blogspot.com/). You are one awesome lady and I would not have survived in the blogger world if not for you. You helped me through very tough times and your writing is something to aspire to. Thank you.
Rule 2 - Share 7 facts about yourself.
1. I am the youngest of 4 children.
2. I love cupcakes!
3. I have a Bachelors Degree in Agriculture.
4. I believed that vampires actually existed up and till I was 16 years old.
5. I tend to wear a lot of black clothes.
6. I once helped a sheep give birth.
7. I always look at the dessert menu first before I eat at a restaurant.
Rule 3 - Choose _____ bloggers to pass this award on to.
I choose #6.
Rule 4 - Notify said recipients of the #3 rule.
Here they are in no particular order:
1. Renee Silvana (http://reneesilvana.blogspot.com/).
2. Nancy (http://introverted-writer.blogspot.com/).
3. Carla (http://carla-jansen.blogspot.com/).
4. J.C. Martin (http://jc-martin.com/fighterwriter/).
5. Katharine Owens (http://katharineowens.blogspot.com/).
6. Wolfie (http://writer-person.blogspot.com/).
Thank you again Heather, you are one awesome lady and thank you to everybody that reads my blog. I am always grateful for your support and interest.
Sunday, March 6, 2011
DIVINE INTERVENTION
I wanted to take part in this awesome blogfest CATCH ME IF YOU CAN (http://kaykays-corner.blogspot.com/2011/02/yay-for-game-plans-aka-catch-me-if-you.html), which is where you post 550 words of your current work in progress and see if you can hook people, to see if you can manage to leave them wanting more (it is currently still open if you want to participate). But my link did not want to load and I think it is Divine intervention.
My entry posted bellow anyway.
I am one of those people who believe that things happen for a reason and I tend to believe in signs. Like my link not wanting to load was a way of stopping myself from making an ass of myself. Why do I say that you ask? Well I have been getting a lot of criticism with regards to my writing which has me thinking that I am not actually as talented as I thought. I posted my 99th page on page99test.com and 12 people commented thus far and the verdict was (drum role please)...8 said they will not turn the page and 4 said they would. 50% said they would not buy this book and the rest were undecided. Plus I got some pages back from my current critique partner and the changes were monumental. Technically my writing is not strong. There are a lot of grammatical errors and apparently I am a bad story teller too. I tend to tell far more than I show, which as you know is bad. But I am not depressed about it or anything.
So, because I am so hard headed, I decided to post my 550 words of my novel Immortal: New Beginning anyway. Keep in mind it is undergoing severe editing as we speak. Enjoy!
Oak Tree city was just like any other city—lots of skyscrapers and no sign of green foliage anywhere. Not to mention millions of people constantly rushing to get somewhere.
It was Friday today and like most people of Oak Tree City, I was walking to work. It was my way of de-stressing before a hard days work.
I didn’t bother looking around to take in the sights or to pay attention to anyone. I didn’t care to know any of these people. I didn’t feel as if I fit in amongst them.
I was approaching the building where I worked when I smelled a heavenly scent that made me stop in my tracks.
I stood on the sidewalk, taking in as much of this wonderful aroma as possible. It smelled sweet like cotton candy but it was also musky. It was quite complex. I had never smelled anything like it.
I closed my eyes and took in the smell. I suddenly felt calm. My mind felt as if it was standing still. I couldn’t think at all.
Wave after wave of powerful emotions over took my body. I felt happy, safe, comforted and a feeling close to being in love.
Then I felt a strong shoulder knock me backwards.
My eyes flew open.
The smell was suddenly gone too and I could finally focus again. I saw the possible culprit. A largely built man wearing a blue pin striped suit.
‘’What the hell? Couldn’t you see me standing here?’’ I shouted.
‘’Who cares lady?’’ the man responded still walking away.
‘’You are an ass!’’
‘’What ever, freak!’’ he responded.
For some reason I always made people uneasy. I looked normal but something about me was just not right.
I realized that I couldn’t really blame the guy for bumping into me. I was the one who stood still on a very busy street.
I didn’t know what came over me though. It was as if the smell had taken control of me somehow.
I ran my hands through my thick curly hair, took a deep breath and crossed the street.
Just as I was about to put my foot on the pavement on the other side, I heard a car come to a screeching stop.
I realized soon enough that the car nearly ran me over.
‘’Get out of the damn street lady!’’ the driver screamed.
‘’Sorry’’ I said, feeling confused.
‘’Don’t be sorry, just get out of the damn way!’’ the driver said.
I still seemed to be affected by the smell because I didn’t see that car coming and the fact that I was almost killed didn’t bother me at the moment.
I rushed onto the sidewalk and hoped that this was not a sign of what the rest of my day was going to be like.
My entry posted bellow anyway.
I am one of those people who believe that things happen for a reason and I tend to believe in signs. Like my link not wanting to load was a way of stopping myself from making an ass of myself. Why do I say that you ask? Well I have been getting a lot of criticism with regards to my writing which has me thinking that I am not actually as talented as I thought. I posted my 99th page on page99test.com and 12 people commented thus far and the verdict was (drum role please)...8 said they will not turn the page and 4 said they would. 50% said they would not buy this book and the rest were undecided. Plus I got some pages back from my current critique partner and the changes were monumental. Technically my writing is not strong. There are a lot of grammatical errors and apparently I am a bad story teller too. I tend to tell far more than I show, which as you know is bad. But I am not depressed about it or anything.
So, because I am so hard headed, I decided to post my 550 words of my novel Immortal: New Beginning anyway. Keep in mind it is undergoing severe editing as we speak. Enjoy!
Oak Tree city was just like any other city—lots of skyscrapers and no sign of green foliage anywhere. Not to mention millions of people constantly rushing to get somewhere.
It was Friday today and like most people of Oak Tree City, I was walking to work. It was my way of de-stressing before a hard days work.
I didn’t bother looking around to take in the sights or to pay attention to anyone. I didn’t care to know any of these people. I didn’t feel as if I fit in amongst them.
I was approaching the building where I worked when I smelled a heavenly scent that made me stop in my tracks.
I stood on the sidewalk, taking in as much of this wonderful aroma as possible. It smelled sweet like cotton candy but it was also musky. It was quite complex. I had never smelled anything like it.
I closed my eyes and took in the smell. I suddenly felt calm. My mind felt as if it was standing still. I couldn’t think at all.
Wave after wave of powerful emotions over took my body. I felt happy, safe, comforted and a feeling close to being in love.
Then I felt a strong shoulder knock me backwards.
My eyes flew open.
The smell was suddenly gone too and I could finally focus again. I saw the possible culprit. A largely built man wearing a blue pin striped suit.
‘’What the hell? Couldn’t you see me standing here?’’ I shouted.
‘’Who cares lady?’’ the man responded still walking away.
‘’You are an ass!’’
‘’What ever, freak!’’ he responded.
For some reason I always made people uneasy. I looked normal but something about me was just not right.
I realized that I couldn’t really blame the guy for bumping into me. I was the one who stood still on a very busy street.
I didn’t know what came over me though. It was as if the smell had taken control of me somehow.
I ran my hands through my thick curly hair, took a deep breath and crossed the street.
Just as I was about to put my foot on the pavement on the other side, I heard a car come to a screeching stop.
I realized soon enough that the car nearly ran me over.
‘’Get out of the damn street lady!’’ the driver screamed.
‘’Sorry’’ I said, feeling confused.
‘’Don’t be sorry, just get out of the damn way!’’ the driver said.
I still seemed to be affected by the smell because I didn’t see that car coming and the fact that I was almost killed didn’t bother me at the moment.
I rushed onto the sidewalk and hoped that this was not a sign of what the rest of my day was going to be like.
Thursday, March 3, 2011
GONE BUT NOT FORGOTTEN BLOGFEST ENTRY
I know I am 3 hours early but I am not sure what tommorrow holds or if I will have internet access. So I am sorry for breaking the rules, but this is too cool of an idea to pass up on.
Anyway, moving on to my top 5 gone but not forgotten TV shows:
1. Firefly
2. X-Files (But with Mulder still in it)
3. Stargate (Original series)
4. The Pretender
5. Will & Grace
So that is it from me. Thanks for reading and giving me the opportunity to participate.
Anyway, moving on to my top 5 gone but not forgotten TV shows:
1. Firefly
2. X-Files (But with Mulder still in it)
3. Stargate (Original series)
4. The Pretender
5. Will & Grace
So that is it from me. Thanks for reading and giving me the opportunity to participate.
Tuesday, March 1, 2011
overload
Welcome to my new followers! I am thankful for your interest.
Sorry I have not been responding to any comments or blogging the past few days. I didn't have access to the Internet for a few days.
How is everyone doing? I have been crazy busy with work but other than that I am good. My computer is still dead and me and big brother still have to share (pouting).
It has been very hot the past few days. I know that is weird considering that it is still snowing on the other half of the world. But I would welcome the cold after not being able to sleep for a week, thanks to the heat.
My manuscript is still being edited. I have not gotten any pages back but all I know is that he is not impressed. He had suggested many changes already (sigh).
Sorry I have not been responding to any comments or blogging the past few days. I didn't have access to the Internet for a few days.
How is everyone doing? I have been crazy busy with work but other than that I am good. My computer is still dead and me and big brother still have to share (pouting).
It has been very hot the past few days. I know that is weird considering that it is still snowing on the other half of the world. But I would welcome the cold after not being able to sleep for a week, thanks to the heat.
My manuscript is still being edited. I have not gotten any pages back but all I know is that he is not impressed. He had suggested many changes already (sigh).
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